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Inspired by this thread here:
http://www.asylumnation.com/ubb/Forum1/HTML/006257.html

Hence the title.

Flash Fiction.

If you are interested, top that thread. Real good one. Do your own!

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Paint-

Great column, man. The whole emotional perspective of it all is cool by itself, but the twist at the end is the kicker.

I really liked it because I had a similar experience in a car accident. The truck I was driving lost a wheel and we spun around in the middle of the freeway going 65-70 mph and slammed into the mountainside. This caused the truck to flip completely, bouncing off the roof above the driver's (my) head once before coming to rest on its wheels. I don't know how long in seconds it took to flip, but I was able to analyze the situation and have considerable discourse with my self about the apparent seriousness of the accident. I distinctly remembering thinking "Wow, we must be crashing! But wait, is this is a crash, it is a pretty bad one. There is no way a crash this bad would happen to us?!?!?! But then the roof just caved in my head and I am hanging upside down, so this MUST be a crash, and a pretty big one too....(repeat denial/understand conversation 3 more times)"

Wicked crazy how time slows down like that.

PS: always wear your sealtbelt

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Paint:

That was brilliant.

I've always attempted to nail repitition like that, as the affect can fuck with a reader. Point out things that they would otherwise gloss over.

That was... Well, much more than I can do.

You nailed that "flowfeel" thing that I may or may not have succesfully conveyed. Regardless, you know it now. Whatever feelings, or lack thereof, that you used to write this piece, extend them into your other styles.

That was...

Thank you. That was a great fucking expression of six seconds.

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You're a hell of a writer, Paint..keep it up.

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Yo, Paint. Kinda scary to read, I might add. I missed hitting a doe by >< that much last night. Amen.

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Great job, Paint.

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