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As usual, I couldn't follow it. Nothing against your writing, it just doesn't flow well for me.

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I thought the first part was brilliant.

Very lyrical. Struck a chord.

Lost it half way through though.

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Yeah Mr. Goat, I debated whether or not to continue on past the middle (I think that I know where you are refering to), and decided to keep going since I hadn't written anything for the site in so long. I made my point too quick, and obfuscated the rest for quantity, which pretty much indicates myself as the bastard son of satan.

Sorry about my shite flow Roshigoth, I don't know why it doesn't work, and any advice that you can give me would be appreciated.

Regardless, thank you both.

*slowly loads pistol*

Really, it means a lot to me...

*Raises pistol to head, begins crying*

I'm eternally grateful.

*Click*

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Hold on there a minute, fellas. Read it again.

Dual-desperation, Feral. I've been in his shoes. I've been in hers, too. Mirror, mirror, on the wall. Who's the fairest one of all?

I can faintly hear that classic Righteous Brothers song, "You've Lost That Loving Feelin'", playing somewhere.

It's over.

She's in denial and he doesn't have the courage to say it. She won't admit the rope is hopelessly slipping from her grasp; he hasn't mustered the strength to tell her to let go.

I wouldn't change a thing, Feral. Been there, done that. Discomforting piece that gets you there without spelling it out in no uncertain terms. Alfred Hitchcock was a master of that.

A continuous loop from denial to procrastination to denial to . . . .

Keep it coming, my friend. Amen.

[This message has been edited by J E B Stuart (edited 02-28-2001).]

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Which is worse? To be suffering, or unable to suffer?


Good piece, Feral; I enjoyed it. Very different than most updates.

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quote:

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Originally posted by Feral Automaton:
Sorry about my shite flow Roshigoth, I don't know why it doesn't work, and any advice that you can give me would be appreciated.

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Feral-

I admit I don't read everything you write. I tried at first and felt befuddled. I still check in on what you put down from time to time, especially after the discussion with PaintCHiPs (that I was completely ignored on!!-)) about style. I hope to engage you about mine as well sometime.

About this one though, I dug it. The first part was very poetic ala your usual stuff, but this one had more of a story that I could follow, almost redguard-ish. I liked the line:

He faintly wishes she would let go of him, as he still needed to pack

As I read the first part of this sentence, an image of him wishing she would leave him formed, only to be dissolved by the simple practicality of his emotion. That was good.

The whole male character here: almost has a heroin junkie haze to it. He is so out of it that he fails to remember school, prepare and pack, has nothing to think of on the drive. The female is classic human: her desire to be loved back interprets his bland perspective as love.

classic, Feral. I really liked it.

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Hey Rosh! Regarding your inability to "follow it", do not despair. As I said some time ago, Feral brings something unfamiliar to the table. I have grown to enjoy the challenges presented by these unfamiliar creations.

I remember when I was a child the first time I heard The Beatles' "Strawberry Fields". It was very unfamililar. It was unlike anything The Beatles had done before.

At first, I did not like Strawberry Fields. Not one bit. For inexplicable reasons, however, I was irresistably compelled to listen to it every time it played on the radio.

The days turned into a week; the week turned into a month. During this time, a strange thing began happening--more and more, I came to look forward to the song playing again on the radio.

Seven weeks passed. By then, I knew I had to have it. Hence, I went to town and bought the 45. Strawberry Fields was side B; Penny Lane was side A. I took it home, put it on my little record player and played both sides again and again.

You know, if Strawberry Fields was a bad song, I seriously doubt I would have ever grown to love it as I did. Because it was unfamiliar, it took some time for me to appreciate it.

No question, at times Feral's stuff is perplexing, even bewildering. Put another way, it is challenging, i.e., a mind-fuck.

His stuff is like a few--very few--unforgettable women I have known.

Well. Enough of me. If I've made anything apparent, it's that I sometimes like listening to myself ramble. Amen.

p.s. Thanks for the compliment about me 'n' the jackass. Amen.

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Originally posted by Nutrimentia:
. . . the discussion with PaintCHiPs (that I was completely ignored on) . . . .

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Hey Nut! I don't know why he ignored you, but I doubt it was an intentional slight. I know first-hand that Paint is a strong fan of your writing. I am, too, for that matter.

Anyway, he lobbied like hell to get you on as a columnist. And that's not to suggest aggressive lobbying was needed on your behalf, for it was readily apparent to all the administrators that your work is special. Rather, the point is, he lobbied like hell because your work excited him like hell.

On behalf of all the administrators, please keep it coming, too. We're damn pleased to have you as a columnist. Amen.

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quote:

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Originally posted by Hedonism:
Which is worse? To be suffering, or unable to suffer? . . . .

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Well put, Hedo. Amen.

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JEB-

Thanks!! I just hope I don't end up being a one hit wonder.

As far the being ingnored is concerned, that was more sarcasm. Paint and Feral were deep in conversation about each other's style and I didn't really have anything out there to be included. Once I clear the attic of some of the crap that I have been intending to write about, I hope to expand to some other types of topics and styles.

Maybe eventaully I can earn the privilege of an excursion with you three. I'll buy the beer of course, but I prefer to smoke you know....

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Feral, son a bitch, you pretty much summed up my current situation.

Only you do it much more eloquently than I.

Thank you.

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I've got more flame than an empty lighter.

Sp00ky ownz me.

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Feral, son a bitch, you pretty much summed up my current situation.

Only you do it much more eloquently than I.

Do you speak of these things out of personal experience or do you draw off others?

Either way, you have definitely captured the feeling and emotion of two people, in love, who have to deal with circumstances such as those every time they are together.

Once again, a triumph.

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Hard to believe I beat out 1,000,000 other sperm isn't it?

I've got more flame than an empty lighter.

Sp00ky ownz me.

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That was excellent.

(Roshigoth, no offense, but how could you NOT get that one?)

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i thought it was beautiful, feral. I cried, even.


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