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". . . born a rebel bitch." Attagirl!

Seriously fun read. Please keep 'em comin'. Amen.

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Registered: Aug 2000
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You sorta lost me with the whole 'dogs' metaphor... made it difficult to decipher. I'm a big fan of the good Doctor, and I'm sure you've got a great story. I just found it unclear who (and what) you were meaning in some places.

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I think the whole dogs thing ruined a probably good story. No offence, though. It reminded me of a bad trip...

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Registered: May 2001
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Hhhmmm...the dog metaphor is the point of the story, Runnin withe big dogs....Hunter is the epitomy of big slobbering stsaus dipped dog...I am depressed if it is found to be confusing, I would like to know where and how it confuses...so any help is appreciated..I have yet to hear that it is confusing, though my audience so far has been older..thanks for your replies, GAZIN

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Registered: Jul 2000
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When I first read it I had mentally prepared a really long post saying essentially what those two have already said.

I'll try and rehash what I was thinking then, though the thoughts are a week old by now.

I understand the desire to not tell the story straight. You want a story afterall, not just an anecdote. But I didn't think the device you chose really works.

When most think of Hunter S. Thompson they think of drugs and writing. The motif of dogs doesn't really fit that. I am guessing that it DOES fit your impression of the encounter, but I don't think it neccessarily fits the guts of the story as it is percieved by the reader. I'm trying to think of a good way to convey why, but I'm coming up short. All I can tell you was that instead of the motif adding to the story, I thought it obstructed it. I felt like I was having to try and pick the elements of the story out of the thematic elements, which is something I personally distaste (I am a very narrative and plot-driven writer, and thus reader). I kept thinking to myself "what's with all this dog nonsense?" I think SOMETIMES it did work. Like the encounter under the table with the exec, I quite liked that, and the narrative and the theme came together nicely there. Other parts, like the encounter with Hunter in the bathroom or the smoking out back with what I assume were cooks or something, I felt it failed and got in the way. Part of that is I'm sure me, I kept trying identify the specific drugs he was using, but I do think a lot of that is the whole dog angle. I kept thinking "I don't think I could pick a theme so totally unrelated to a reading of fiction in a bathroom while snorting cocaine as dogs" if that makes any sense. I thought it got in the way more often then not.

I was thinking of some other cool ways you could try to tell the story. I think a rambling beat style, something like Burroughs, would have been quite cool (and relevent for that matter I suppose), or even trying to write it in the style of Thompson himself. I don't know.

But I agree with what those other two said, I don't think the Big Dogs theme works for this story.

But man, I can't believe you didn't go with them. heh.

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Bah, don't listen to them Gazin, they're all too self contained to get it. I loved it.

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Registered: May 2001
Location: Arizona
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Ok, responses to above...the story was not about Hunter Thompson, the story is about my encounter with him..Now..I could have written it in the a more normal fashion but it then it would have been just another carbon copy of handfuls of stories about hunter and peoples encounters with him..I chose the dog thing to be different and to be honest had Hunter in mind when I wrote it..His ego will love it..I sent it to him so hope he enjoys..

Jeb, Mordecai, thanks for the support, glad ya enjoyed it

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