Registered: Dec 2001
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Basically, it's a web design concept... and I'm tired of thinking about it, so I'm soliciting your feedback and criticism, though the constructive variant is preferred. Thanks.

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i take it you intend to make each of those dots down the right side link to something, maybe with a mouseover effect of some kind? and text out in the white area? looks alright to me.

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You ought to somehow work Laville into the little map at the top, though I understand how recognizable and powerful an image Death Valley is.

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Yeah... I know... but I kind of would have to flip the world, and then redraw the map for perspective... and I'm not down with that. As it is, the yellow swoosh goes right through the Laville patio on the bottom section.

Thanks to you both for your comments... I appreciate you taking the time.

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I like it except for the pastel circles in the white area.. what the hell are they for?

and the yellow.. I just don't really like yellow.

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It's good looking, but what's its purpose? What is the target audience?
How does the html work (large resolution browsers, etc.)?

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the colors are smashing .. very nice. I can't really see the circles sabine's talking about unless I tilt my screen all the way down, which defeats the whole color thing .. I have no idea what I'm looking at when I look at them that way. my guess is that they're really faint and sort of in the background? that's a good place for them I think. to dark and thay take away from the swoosh, which carries your eye from the title bar to the begining of the text below (which is a good thing)

I like how the 'swoosh' brings the top and bottom together .. the only thing is those dots make the swoosh look lop-sided .. if you're going to use an expanding table in your html then the swoosh will only look more skewed when the top table and bottom tables are spread further apart .. either way I would probably leave the two tone back ground (the swoosh being white and the table being that off white/yellow), but I might make the dots straight up and down .. that way you could stretch the swoosh and not have it toss off the dots like mad.

and if the laville house is a real place and it's on your map, turn it red or a darker blue and set it over the swoosh bit (leave it on the bottom .. the title says what it is .. the color on the bottom would just be an egg.

I guess any changes should be considered based on whether or not you're doing the code .. if you are then you can simplify the picture a lot to make it easy to write without really losing any of the design stuff .. but if someone else is going to write it, then I would make it look as groovey (that's a real live art term I think) as possible and let the nerd types figure out how to make it work.

(a side note: I'm on a laptop and the colors are always screwed up depending on how my screen is tilted, so any coments and remarks about color should be taken with a grain of salt)

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All I can say is theres not much I can fault there. good work that man.

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Now that the fags have been unmasked (through their interest in design), we can begin stage 2, 'Operation Excruciating Death for MANLOVERS'. Obviously, God is still onboard for stage 3, 'ETERNAL TORMENT', so it is out of our hands once they stop breathing.

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Good feedback, Sabine, about the circles... they are now "missing."


MadLucas - love the idea about putting the Lavilles on top of the swoosh (it's a two-building complex, and currently the swoosh goes right over the patio between them). I'm going to fix that when I get home tonight.
I don't think I'm going to make the table expand.. too much trouble, and it's just for a news letter. Thanks a ton for your commentary... much appreciated.

Thanks guys... back to work for me.

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Registered: Mar 2002
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looks neat leaky..

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